Post by Tybalt on Sept 21, 2010 5:25:09 GMT -8
this is a first attempt so be nice people 
. This is also a college paper so if you find any spelling or grammar errors please let me know.
This is also a back story to Anixa and should not be considered a plot line (olo asked me to clarify that ^^)
Anixa slowly walks into a building she has longed to never come back to. The memories of this place have haunted her for a long time. She stands outside the entrance to the School of Dark Arts and a cold chill runs down her spine. Upon opening the door she passes out in remembrance of how her sister Zayn died.
Zayn was studying to be a great warrior. She and Anixa had left the village to recover an ancient scroll Kartia needed to translate for Tetrarch Thifiell. It was a short journey to the school, there was an ominous glow about today though. Zayn shrugged off the glow saying “c’mon sis lets go get those documents, they must be pretty important.” Anixa being young had not noticed the glow on the horizon and was content with being with her older sister.
The walk had been different from the times they had taken it in the past. This time there was Truman Orcs scattered throughout their homeland. This worried Anixa as she had never seen an Orc before. Zayn comforted her sister reassuring her she was a great warrior and has never lost a fight.
As they progress further Anixa gets more worried and clings next to Zayn, quivering she ask “you’ll protect me from the orcs if they attack won’t you sis?”
“Of course I will, I would never let anyone harm you sis” replied Zayn
Zayn and Anixa take a small break once they reach the school. Anixa already alert hears some commotion inside the building and clings closer to her sister. Zayn shocked ask “what are you scared of Anixa?”
“There is something going on inside the school I can hear it from here, it sounds like fighting.”
“Let's go check it out I’m sure there is nothing to worry about.”
Zayn opens the door and finds a Vaiss Orc leader and his many warriors trying to overrun the school. Zayn push’s Anixa aside yelling “Protect your self don’t let them see you.” As she rush’s into to help fight off the horde of orcs. Overwhelmed in numbers the schools warriors and mages are no match for the orcs. Anixa watching all this from a corner see’s Zayn die from the leader.
The orcs finally clear out the room and proceed on into the school. Once Anixa feels the coast is clear she ventures out amongst the dead to find Zayn. Kneeling next to Zayn’s side, Anixa begins to cry. “Zayn, I promise to grow up to be Aden’s greatest healer. Never letting anyone die in my presence again.”
. This is also a college paper so if you find any spelling or grammar errors please let me know. This is also a back story to Anixa and should not be considered a plot line (olo asked me to clarify that ^^)
Anixa slowly walks into a building she has longed to never come back to. The memories of this place have haunted her for a long time. She stands outside the entrance to the School of Dark Arts and a cold chill runs down her spine. Upon opening the door she passes out in remembrance of how her sister Zayn died.
Zayn was studying to be a great warrior. She and Anixa had left the village to recover an ancient scroll Kartia needed to translate for Tetrarch Thifiell. It was a short journey to the school, there was an ominous glow about today though. Zayn shrugged off the glow saying “c’mon sis lets go get those documents, they must be pretty important.” Anixa being young had not noticed the glow on the horizon and was content with being with her older sister.
The walk had been different from the times they had taken it in the past. This time there was Truman Orcs scattered throughout their homeland. This worried Anixa as she had never seen an Orc before. Zayn comforted her sister reassuring her she was a great warrior and has never lost a fight.
As they progress further Anixa gets more worried and clings next to Zayn, quivering she ask “you’ll protect me from the orcs if they attack won’t you sis?”
“Of course I will, I would never let anyone harm you sis” replied Zayn
Zayn and Anixa take a small break once they reach the school. Anixa already alert hears some commotion inside the building and clings closer to her sister. Zayn shocked ask “what are you scared of Anixa?”
“There is something going on inside the school I can hear it from here, it sounds like fighting.”
“Let's go check it out I’m sure there is nothing to worry about.”
Zayn opens the door and finds a Vaiss Orc leader and his many warriors trying to overrun the school. Zayn push’s Anixa aside yelling “Protect your self don’t let them see you.” As she rush’s into to help fight off the horde of orcs. Overwhelmed in numbers the schools warriors and mages are no match for the orcs. Anixa watching all this from a corner see’s Zayn die from the leader.
The orcs finally clear out the room and proceed on into the school. Once Anixa feels the coast is clear she ventures out amongst the dead to find Zayn. Kneeling next to Zayn’s side, Anixa begins to cry. “Zayn, I promise to grow up to be Aden’s greatest healer. Never letting anyone die in my presence again.”
got a B on the paper. Mainly for grammar errors. Missing a "," here and a ";" there. I've decided that with the revisions to turn this into a plot line and make a story out of it. I'll be making a new post to start the RP. It took me almost a week to write that so be patient with my replies please.